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OK. Here's my dilemma:
Grammar/punctuation is by definition, a set protocol of perception.
How does one punctuate a piece, not according to "written style," but according to "spoken English," and furthermore,
not just spoken like a nightly news anchor in monotone...
but in rhythm, with inflection, with dramatic pauses,
so I guess my question should be...
How would one punctuate a theatrical piece?
Because this last poem I wrote is intrinsically tied to an album I listened to while I wrote it.
Also, being grammatically "correct" means that the way in which someone expresses themselves, is "incorrect" if it doesn't follow the rules.
Sentence fragments, etc.
Well, I tell you what. I bet that when folks first came out with jazz, that it was deemed "incorrect" by many people; still is. (Though I myself love it.)
Point being...how does someone fit punctuation to THEIR voice, in order to allow others to hear it my way, not someone elses?
El Capitanwho is walking towards me
with the lumbering gait
as the horns blare
they gleam in the heat
as he comes closer
nearing the crowd
a one-man parade
the regiments are only
affixed with glue to their
he is the captain
his cigar is succulent
and I was afraid
the old woman stands in her doorway
on the threshold she peers at his shadow
she recalls a long-lost suitor
who was ravished by the sea
she perceives the captain's face
wondering at the eyes behind the sunglasses
and now he is pausing at her home
she takes his offered hand, kissing the signet there
grateful for his smile
and she entreats him to come in
for a repast
a very old man sits at the table
looking out to sea
he mutters to himself
then turns to see the captain enter
the men look at each other for a moment
and the old man mutters again
looking out to sea
he talks slowly
each word an anchor
his eyebrows grey as fog
gazing at the restless breakers
that lap the shor
I'm not asking for someone to do it for me. I just want to know if there are different guidelines.
Or should poems have footnotes or something, like a script for a play, that tells you what was intended?
For that matter, look at Shakespeare's plays. How do we know to read them in a certain style? Perhaps that's a different mechanism.
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